1 school 2017-11-14 2 league of legend 2017-11-11 3 The largest chocolate bar 2017-11-07 4 changing academy 2017-11-04 5 micheal phelps vs great white shark 2017-08-24 6 kakao talk 2017-08-10 7 youtube 2017-08-06 8 league of legend 2017-08-01 9 Haikyu 2017-07-20 10 school uniform 2017-06-11 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 이승문 작성일 2017-11-14 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 school 내 용 Today I will talk about what we studied in our school. First class was English. We talked about job in English. Second, it was P.E class. we studied Takewondow and we made dance with Takewondow. We couldn't finish it so we decided to make it more at Thursday. Next it was music class. We listened to music and we have to write about that music for homework. Next it was math. We studied sphere. It was easy part in math so we studied easily. Finally we studied science. It was little hard. We studied about molecular motion. It means molecule move forever even though someone don't touch it. I hope scientist can find how molecule can move itself. 답변자 ts0135 답변일 2017-11-15 답변내용 Today I will talk about what we studied in our school. (missing punctuation [comma]) >>Today, I will talk about what we studied in our school. First class was English. (missing article 'The') >> ACCEPTABLE << >>The first class was English. We talked about job in English. (correct noun 'jobs') >>We talked about jobs in English. Second, it was P.E class. (missing article 'The') >> ACCEPTABLE << >>The second was P.E class. we studied Takewondow and we made dance with Takewondow. (correct letter 'We'/ correct spelling 'Taekwando'/ unnecessary noun 'Taekwando', thus pronoun 'it' was used) >>We studied Taekwondo and we made a dance steps with it. We couldn't finish it so we decided to make it more at Thursday. (correct choices of words) >>We couldn't finish it so we decided to practice more on Thursday. Next it was music class. (missing punctuation [comma]) >>Next, it was music class. We listened to music and we have to write about that music for homework. >> CORRECT << Next it was math. (redundant word 'Next'/ correct proper noun 'Math') >>Then, the following subject was Math. We studied sphere. >> CORRECT << It was easy part in math so we studied easily. (correct choices of words) >> ACCEPTABLE << >>It was the basic part in math so we studied easily. Finally we studied science. (missing punctuation [comma]/ correct letter 'Science') >>Finally, we studied Science. It was little hard. (missing article 'a') >>It was a little hard. We studied about molecular motion. >> CORRECT << It means molecule move forever even though someone don't touch it. (correct verb 'doesn't') >>It means molecule move forever even though someone doesn't touch it. I hope scientist can find how molecule can move itself. (missing article 'a') >>I hope a scientist can find how molecule can move itself. *NOTE : 1) Observe the correct formation of the sentences. Today, I will talk about what we studied in our school. The first class was English. We talked about jobs in English. The second was P.E class. We studied Taekwondo and we made a dance steps with it. We couldn't finish it so we decided to practice more on Thursday. Next, it was music class. We listened to music and we have to write about that music for homework. Then, the following subject was Math. We studied sphere. It was the basic part in math so we studied easily. Finally, we studied Science. It was a little hard. We studied about molecular motion. It means molecule move forever even though someone doesn't touch it. I hope a scientist can find how molecule can move itself. 2) Use a capital letter on the title : WRONG : school CORRECT : School =================================================================================================================== Dear David, I like the story today. Thank you for sharing. But give important attention to given corrections. I look forward to be reading more in your diary. What could be your next story. Hmmm.... Waiting, Teacher Mea