1 school 2017-11-14 2 league of legend 2017-11-11 3 The largest chocolate bar 2017-11-07 4 changing academy 2017-11-04 5 micheal phelps vs great white shark 2017-08-24 6 kakao talk 2017-08-10 7 youtube 2017-08-06 8 league of legend 2017-08-01 9 Haikyu 2017-07-20 10 school uniform 2017-06-11 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 이승문 작성일 2017-11-07 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 The largest chocolate bar 내 용 Today I will talk about the largest chocolate bar. The first chocalte bar was made in 1847. Joseph Fry found a way to mix coco powder, sugar, cocoa. In Peru, there was a new record. Pastry chefs made a largest choclate bar in the world. They used 900 kilograms of cocoa and more than 200kilograms of chestnuts and wallnuts. It was 7 meters long, three meters wide, 4 centemeters thick. This chocolate was eaten by children and participants. I think it needed a lot of cooperation. 답변자 ts0135 답변일 2017-11-08 답변내용 Today I will talk about the largest chocolate bar. (missing punctuation [comma]) >>Today, I will talk about the largest chocolate bar. The first chocalte bar was made in 1847. (correct spelling 'chocolate') >>The first chocolate bar was made in 1847. Joseph Fry found a way to mix coco powder, sugar, cocoa. >> CORRECT << In Peru, there was a new record. >> CORRECT << Pastry chefs made a largest choclate bar in the world. (correct spelling 'chocolate') >>The pastry chefs made the largest chocolate bar in the world. They used 900 kilograms of cocoa and more than 200kilograms of chestnuts and wallnuts. (correct spacing "...200 kilograms.."/ correct spelling 'walnuts') >>They used 900 kilograms of cocoa and more than 200 kilograms of chestnuts and walnuts. It was 7 meters long, three meters wide, 4 centemeters thick. (correct spelling 'centimeters'/ missing conjunction 'and') >>It was 7 meters long, three meters wide, and 4 centimeters thick. This chocolate was eaten by children and participants. >> CORRECT << I think it needed a lot of cooperation. >> CORRECT << *NOTE : 1) Observe the corrections made. 2) Double check the correct spelling of the words. 3) Practice writing your own sentences. 4) Practice making your own title. =================================================================================================================== Dear Daniel, I suddenly wonder why you needed a lot of cooperation. Would you want to be a part of chocolate making next time? Where do you think it will be held? What country do you think will make the largest chocolate bar on earth? Looking forward to hear from you soon... Have a sweet day, Teacher Mea