1 school 2017-11-14 2 league of legend 2017-11-11 3 The largest chocolate bar 2017-11-07 4 changing academy 2017-11-04 5 micheal phelps vs great white shark 2017-08-24 6 kakao talk 2017-08-10 7 youtube 2017-08-06 8 league of legend 2017-08-01 9 Haikyu 2017-07-20 10 school uniform 2017-06-11 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 이승문 작성일 2016-02-01 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 naruto 내 용 Today I will talk about the comic naruto. Naruto's friend souske become more stronger. he have kaleidoscope saryunan and it can make amateras, kaguchuki and sosano. amateras is fire and it never go out. kaguchuki can make amateras what we want. For example, we can make amateras arrow. Sosano is good at defence. It can defense almost everything and it can also use good skills. Souske's sosano use indra's arrow. One day, every villiage people come and say something about akachuki. Souske come and he make people hurt and attak people. Madara is acahuki's general. He come and he say he will attack everyone because he will make every person sleep. I think next time, it be a war. 답변자 ts0132 답변일 2016-02-01 답변내용 Hi Daniel! I hope that the people will be saved from the war. Please study the corrections on the sentences and try to write the better ones next time. Have a good night! T. Maribel ========================================================================================================================== Today I will talk about the comic naruto. (Correct) Naruto's friend souske become more stronger. *** Naruto's friend, Souske has become much stronger. he have kaleidoscope saryunan and it can make amateras, kaguchuki and sosano. *** He has as kaleidoscope called Saryunan and it can make amateras, Kaguchuki and Sosano. Amateras is fire and it never goes out. (Correct) kaguchuki can make amateras what we want. *** Kaguchuki can make any Amateras that we want. For example, we can make amateras arrow. (Correct) Sosano is good at defence. *** Sosano is good at defense. -----> right spelling. It can defense almost everything and it can also use good skills. *** It can defend you from almost everything and also uses good skills. Souske's sosano use indra's arrow. (Correct) One day, every villiage people come and say something about akachuki. *** One day, every villager came and said something about Akachuki. Souske come and he make people hurt and attak people. *** Souske came and hurt the people by attacking them. Madara is acahuki's general. (Correct) He come and he say he will attack everyone because he will make every person sleep. *** He came and said that he will attack everyone by making every person fall asleep. I think next time, it will be a war. (Correct)