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A&Acapture
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answer
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Robot suit fight 9(finale)
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robot arm
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Teacher!
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Robot Suit Fight 8
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Robot suit fight 7
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Robot suit fight 6
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Robot suit fight 5
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First, stark shot the gun. But, meji catch! So, stark ran to meji and push meji. Then, meji turn into paper. It was a doll! Then, in back, there was real meji. Meji kick stark and grab the gun. Then, stark ran forward and the gun got out of the robot. Meji smash the gun! Stark got so mad that, he grab the two arms and kick the body. Then, meji got out of his arms! Then, meji taped the bomb into his body and ran to stark. Stark kick the bomb and his feet go up and up! And of course, the bomb got exploed. And feet got down and got fire! Finally, it got into meji¡¯s leg! BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM! Stark win!
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First, stark shot the gun. -Stark But, meji catch! -Meji caught the bullet. So, stark ran to meji and push meji. -Stark, Meji and pushed Meji Then, meji turn into paper. -Meji turned into a paper It was a doll! -correct Then, in back, there was real meji. -at the back, there was the real Meji Meji kick stark and grab the gun. kicked; grabbed Then, stark ran forward and the gun got out of the robot. -correct Meji smash the gun! -smashed Stark got so mad that, he grab the two arms and kick the body. -grabbed; kicked Then, meji got out of his arms! -Meji Then, meji taped the bomb into his body and ran to stark. -Meji Stark kick the bomb and his feet go up and up! -kicked; went And of course, the bomb got exploed. -exploded And feet got down and got fire! -fired Finally, it got into meji¡¯s leg! Meji's BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM! Stark win! -won Comments: 1. The story is really exciting. 2. Capitalize names. 3. Check the spelling of some words. 4. Use past tenses. Mason, thank you for this story! I enjoyed reading it. Follow my corrections when you write your next story. Keep on writing! :)
