1 A&Acapture 2014-12-29 2 answer 2014-11-14 3 Robot suit fight 9(finale) 2014-10-08 4 robot arm 2014-09-25 5 Teacher! 2014-08-28 6 Robot Suit Fight 8 2014-08-21 7 Robot suit fight 7 2014-08-06 8 Robot suit fight 6 2014-07-30 9 Robot suit fight 5 2014-07-23 10 robot suit 4 2014-07-14 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김찬호 작성일 2012-12-07 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 Dc diary No.11-President election 내 용 Today I'm going to write about president election. In December 19, there is presidental election. I liked Ahn Cheul-soo. But Ahn Cheul-soo resignted. So I think I have to support Moon Jae-in. I hate Park Geun-Hye. She is look like lier and I think she will wreck the promise. If she become the president of South Korea, Korea will destroyed. I like Moon Jae-in. His promise is more trusting then Park's because, you see that, Park Geun-Hye just say, say, say, say and say again. But Moon Jae-in don't. He say, say, and lastly he will not wreck the promise. I hate Lee Jung-he most. Because in the debate of Moon Jae-in, Park Geun-Hye and Lee Jung-he, Lee Jung-he was leader of debate. She just attack and don't listen. All of the people is now blame her and critique her. I'm the one of those people. I hope Moon Jae-in will be president. I saw Moon Jae-in's advertisement truck. It was great. And Park Geun-Hye will ruin this country. Park Geun-hye VS. Moon Jae-in. Moon Jae-in will win. 답변자 tc0073 답변일 2012-12-10 답변내용 Today I'm going to write about president election. >>Today I'm going to write about the presidential election. (lack of article / choice of word) In December 19, there is presidental election. >>On December 19, the presidential election will be held. (choice of preposition / intended message) I liked Ahn Cheul-soo. But Ahn Cheul-soo resignted. So I think I have to support Moon Jae-in. >>I liked Ahn Cheul-soo but Ahn Cheul-soo resigned so I think I have to support Moon Jae-in. (spelling / sentence construction) I hate Park Geun-Hye. >>Good sentence! She is look like lier and I think she will wreck the promise. >>She looks like a liar and I think she will break the promise. (verb usage / spelling) If she become the president of South Korea, Korea will destroyed. >>If she becomes the president of South Korea, Korea will be destroyed. (subject-verb agreement / lackk of verb) I like Moon Jae-in. >>Good sentence! His promise is more trusting then Park's because, you see that, Park Geun-Hye just say, say, say, say and say again. But Moon Jae-in don't. >>His promise is more trusting than Park's because Park Geun-Hye just says her promises over and over but Moon Jae in doesn't. (intended message) He say, say, and lastly he will not wreck the promise. >>He says it many times but he says that he will not break is promise. (intended message) I hate Lee Jung-he most. Because in the debate of Moon Jae-in, Park Geun-Hye and Lee Jung-he, Lee Jung-he was leader of debate. >>I hate Lee Jung-he the most because in the debate of Moon Jae-in, Park Geun-Hye and Lee Jung-he, Lee Jung-he was the leader of the debate. (lack of article) She just attack and don't listen. >>She just attacked and she didn't listen. (verb tense) All of the people is now blame her and critique her. >>Now all the people blame and criticize her. (sentence construction) I'm the one of those people. >>I'm one of those people. (unnecessary article) I hope Moon Jae-in will be president. >>I hope Moon Jae-in will be the president. (lack of article) I saw Moon Jae-in's advertisement truck. >>I saw Moon Jae-in's advertisement on a truck. (lack of preposition and article) It was great. >>Good sentence! And Park Geun-Hye will ruin this country. >>Park Geun-Hye will ruin this country. (unnecessary word) Park Geun-hye VS. Moon Jae-in. >>Good sentence! Moon Jae-in will win. >>Good sentence! Thanks for writing! I really appreciate your effort!