1 A&Acapture 2014-12-29 2 answer 2014-11-14 3 Robot suit fight 9(finale) 2014-10-08 4 robot arm 2014-09-25 5 Teacher! 2014-08-28 6 Robot Suit Fight 8 2014-08-21 7 Robot suit fight 7 2014-08-06 8 Robot suit fight 6 2014-07-30 9 Robot suit fight 5 2014-07-23 10 robot suit 4 2014-07-14 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김찬호 작성일 2012-11-26 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 Dc diary No.3-treasure 내 용 Today's topic is my treasure. Dc diary is free diary. I can write anything. I want to talk about treasure. So read carefully. First of all. I collected game cards. I have about 100 cards. It is in my metal box. The other things that in my box is drawing book from my grand father. My dad used. Now I'm using. Also I have beer bottle. Not real beer bottle. It is timer. My dad went to the cafeteria with his friends. Then he won the game. So he get this beer bottle timer. I used when I was take a nap, or English listning. But one day it broked so I'm keeping this. Other thing is doll. You might think I'm crazy because boy is playing with doll. But actually it is not a doll. It is decoration. I founded it in bathroom's sink. It was little wet. Now it is dry. List This is the list that I will put it in the box. 1. boat. My dad carved the wooden boat with carving knife and wood. It is very valuable. But I think my brother will demonstration. It is 50-50. Not mine. 2. Kidzania souvenir. I have One newspaper that I made, Stampbook, Lots of Kidzos, and many others. 3. My pictures. I want to remember me. 답변자 tc0073 답변일 2012-11-27 답변내용 Today's topic is my treasure. >>Good sentence! Dc diary is free diary. >> Dc diary is a free diary. (lack of article) I can write anything. >>Good sentence! I want to talk about treasure. So read carefully. >> I want to talk about treasure so read carefully. (sentence construction) First of all. I collected game cards. >>First of all, I collect game cards. (verb tense) I have about 100 cards. >>Good sentence! It is in my metal box. >>Good sentence! The other things that in my box is drawing book from my grand father. >>The other thing that is in my box is a drawing book from my grandfather. (lack of article) My dad used. Now I'm using. >>My dad used it before and now I’m using it. (sentence construction) Also I have beer bottle. Not real beer bottle. >>I also have a beer bottle but it is not real. (sentence construction) It is timer. >>It is a timer. (lack of article) My dad went to the cafeteria with his friends. Then he won the game. So he get this beer bottle timer. >> My dad went to the cafeteria with his friends, then he won a game so he got this beer bottle timer. (sentence construction / verb tense) I used when I was take a nap, or English listning. But one day it broked so I'm keeping this. >>I used it when I took a nap and during my listening class in English, but one day it broke so I’m keeping it. (sentence construction / verb tense) Other thing is doll. >>Another thing that I have is a doll. (intended message) You might think I'm crazy because boy is playing with doll. But actually it is not a doll. >> You might think I'm crazy because a boy is playing with a doll, but actually it is not a doll. (lack of article / sentence construction) It is decoration. >>It is a decoration. (lack of article) I founded it in bathroom's sink. >>I found it in the bathroom’s sink. (verb tense / lack of article) It was little wet. >>It was a little wet. (lack of article) Now it is dry. >>Good sentence! List This is the list that I will put it in the box. >>This is the list of things that I will put in the box. (intended message) 1. boat. My dad carved the wooden boat with carving knife and wood. >> My dad carved the wooden boat with a carving knife and wood. (lack of article) It is very valuable. But I think my brother will demonstration. >> It is very valuable but I think my brother will be angry. (intended message) It is 50-50. Not mine. >>It is ours, not mine. (intended message) 2. Kidzania souvenir. I have One newspaper that I made, Stampbook, Lots of Kidzos and many others. >>Good sentence! 3. My pictures. I want to remember me. >> My pictures. I want to remember myself. (choice of word) Thanks for writing! Keep up the good work!