1 A&Acapture 2014-12-29 2 answer 2014-11-14 3 Robot suit fight 9(finale) 2014-10-08 4 robot arm 2014-09-25 5 Teacher! 2014-08-28 6 Robot Suit Fight 8 2014-08-21 7 Robot suit fight 7 2014-08-06 8 Robot suit fight 6 2014-07-30 9 Robot suit fight 5 2014-07-23 10 robot suit 4 2014-07-14 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김찬호 작성일 2012-11-20 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 My favorite countries 내 용 Today I'm gonna write about my favorite countries. I have four favorite countries. U.S.A, Switzerland, Italy, Spain. U.S.A. Real name is United States of America. At present, Barack Obama is the acting president. He won again in 45th President election. It is just like what I wanted. If Mitt Romney become the president, he will damage at Korean economy. According to my dad, "He will not import the Korean product." Also I hate the Republican Party, or the Republicans. Capital city of United States of America is "Washington D.C." But remember, it is not Washing turn. I like America because I like MLB. It is Major League Baseball. In National League, I'm fan of Saint Louis Cardinals. In American League, I'm fan of New York Yankees in Eastern, fan of Cleveland Indians in middle, lastly, Texas Rangers in Western. New York Yankees is the best in Eastern. Cleveland Indians is fourth in middle, Texas Rangers is in second in Western. Switzerland Many people want to get citizen ship of this country. Because Switzerland was neutral during the war. But it is more hard then pick the star in the sky. Many people failed. Also, Switzerland had many languages. They used France language, Italian, German, and many other languages. So I think it is hard to live there. Italy I want to visit Italy. Because there are many cars like Lamborghini, Ferrari, Fiat, Alfaromeo, astonmartin, maserati, and Pagani Zonda. I want to ride one. Also there are Leaning tower of Pisa. It is leaning about 5.5 dgrees. Italy government started counstruction, and ended on 2001. But it is now leaning anyway. Spain I always wanted to go this country because that I want to watch bullfight. I think it is fun. When one player shake the red cape at bull, then they fight. there are many kind of bull fight players. Matador-leading role of bullfight. Banderillero-who stab spear at bull's head(two of them) Picador-who riding horse and stab spear at bull(two of them) Peneo-assistant(many of them) First Matador prompt the bull. Then, Picadors comes out, riding horse and stab spear at bull. Next, Banderillero stab six spears at bull's neck and back. Lastly Matador kill them with knife and bull is dead. I want to visit all this countries. 답변자 tc0073 답변일 2012-11-21 답변내용 Today I'm gonna write about my favorite countries. >>Good sentence! I have four favorite countries. U.S.A, Switzerland, Italy, Spain. >>I have four favorite countries such as the U.S.A, Switzerland and Italy, Spain. (lack of conjunction) U.S.A. Real name is United States of America. >>The real name is United States of America. (lack of article) At present, Barack Obama is the acting president. >> At present, Barack Obama is the president. (unnecessary word) He won again in 45th President election. >>He won again in the 45th President election. (lack of article) It is just like what I wanted. >>Good sentence! If Mitt Romney become the president, he will damage at Korean economy. >>If Mitt Romney becomes the president, he will damage the Korean economy. (subject-verb agreement / choice of word:article) According to my dad, "He will not import the Korean product." >>According to my dad, "He will not import Korean products." (unnecessary article / pluralization) Also I hate the Republican Party, or the Republicans. >>I also hate the Republican Party or the Republicans. (word order) Capital city of United States of America is "Washington D.C." But remember, it is not Washing turn. >>The capital city of the United States of America is "Washington D.C." but remember, it is not Washing turn. (lack of article) I like America because I like MLB. >>Good sentence! It is Major League Baseball. >>It is the Major League Baseball. (lack of article) In National League, I'm fan of Saint Louis Cardinals. >>In the National League, I'm a fan of Saint Louis Cardinals. (lack of article) In American League, I'm fan of New York Yankees in Eastern, fan of Cleveland Indians in middle, lastly, Texas Rangers in Western. >>In the American League, I'm a fan of New York Yankees in Eastern, fan of Cleveland Indians in middle, lastly, Texas Rangers in Western. (lack of article) New York Yankees is the best in Eastern. >>The New York Yankees is the best in Eastern. (lack of article) Cleveland Indians is fourth in middle, Texas Rangers is in second in Western. >>What is middle? Switzerland Many people want to get citizen ship of this country. Because Switzerland was neutral during the war. But it is more hard then pick the star in the sky. >>Many people want to become citizens of this country because Switzerland was neutral during the war. (intended message / sentence construction) Many people failed. >>Good sentence! Also, Switzerland had many languages. >>Switzerland also had many languages. (word order) They used France language, Italian, German, and many other languages. So I think it is hard to live there. >>They used French, Italian, German and many other languages so I think it is hard to live there. (word form / sentence construction) Italy I want to visit Italy. Because there are many cars like Lamborghini, Ferrari, Fiat, Alfaromeo, astonmartin, maserati, and Pagani Zonda. >>I want to visit Italy because there are many cars like Lamborghini, Ferrari, Fiat, Alfaromeo, Astonmartin, Maserati and Pagani Zonda. (sentence construction / capitalization) I want to ride one. >>Good sentence! Also there are Leaning tower of Pisa. >>The Leaning of Pisa is also there. (word order) It is leaning about 5.5 dgrees. >>Good sentence! Italy government started counstruction, and ended on 2001. But it is now leaning anyway. >>The Italian government started counstructing it and it ended in 2001 but it is now leaning anyway. (lack of article / word form / sentence construction) Spain I always wanted to go this country because that I want to watch bullfight. >>I always wanted to go to this country because I want to watch bullfight. (lack of preposition / unnecessary word) I think it is fun. >>Good sentence! When one player shake the red cape at bull, then they fight. >>When one player shakes the red cape at the bull,they start to fight. (subject-verb agreement) there are many kind of bull fight players. >>There are many kinds of bull fight players. (capitalization / pluralization) Matador-leading role of bullfight. >>Matador-plays the lead role in a bullfight. (intended message) Banderillero-who stab spear at bull's head(two of them) >>Banderillero- the who stabs a spear at the bull's head(two of them) (subject-verb agreement / lack of article) Picador-who riding horse and stab spear at bull(two of them) >>Picador-the one who rides a horse and stabs a spear at the bull(two of them) (subject-verb agreement) Peneo-assistant(many of them) First Matador prompt the bull. >>First, the Matador prompts the bull. (lack of article / subject-verb agreement) Then, Picadors comes out, riding horse and stab spear at bull. >>Then, the Picadors comes out, riding a horse and stabs a spear at the bull. (lack of article / subject-verb agreement) Next, Banderillero stab six spears at bull's neck and back. >>Next, the Banderillero stabs six spears at the bull's neck and back. (lack of article / subject-verb agreement) Lastly Matador kill them with knife and bull is dead. >>Lastly, the Matador kills them with a knife and bull is dead. (lack of article / subject-verb agreement) I want to visit all this countries. >>I want to visit all those countries. (choice of word) Please make your diary a bit short so it's easy to check. Thanks for writing!