1 A&Acapture 2014-12-29 2 answer 2014-11-14 3 Robot suit fight 9(finale) 2014-10-08 4 robot arm 2014-09-25 5 Teacher! 2014-08-28 6 Robot Suit Fight 8 2014-08-21 7 Robot suit fight 7 2014-08-06 8 Robot suit fight 6 2014-07-30 9 Robot suit fight 5 2014-07-23 10 robot suit 4 2014-07-14 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김찬호 작성일 2012-11-15 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 Christmas Wish list. 내 용 It is only about a month left before Christ mas. So I want to make a wish list. I think I can get from mom, dad, or buy my self. Here it is my wish list. 1. New game CD - I don't play game many times. I just only play at weekends. Just play station 2. I have game CD of complication, and soccer game. I want a basket ball game CD or Starcraft Game CD. I saw my cousin was playing Starcraft. It seem very fun. I like Pretos. I cousin like Terrain. My brother don't like Starcraft. I want a basket ball game CD because I like basket ball. 2. New labtop - My labtop is really my father's It means that If father take it to company, I can't use it. My dad said he is going to buy me a new labtop when I become 5 or 6th grade, but I want to get now. 3. New bike - The bike that I'm riding is my dad's. It means that used when he was young(?). So it is very old and it crash easily. It also very old. So I want to get a new bike. I'm gathering the money to buy a bike, but it is too small to buy a bike. 4. Lego Star Wars - Days ago, I saw a very big and very good Lego. It was Lego Star Wars. I think it is the best Star Wars Lego I've seen. It is so wonderful. So I want to get it one. 5. R/C helicopter or plane. - When I went to the Science park, I flight the R/C(remote control) Air plane. But sometimes, I think helicopter is better. So I want to get one of them. 6. New BB gun - My M-16 gun is also from my dad. So it is very old too. So I want a new, with laser pointer on it. I think it is all done. I can't get all these persent, but I will work hard to get it. 답변자 tc0073 답변일 2012-11-16 답변내용 It is only about a month left before Christ mas. So I want to make a wish list. >>It is only about a month left before Christmas, so I want to make a wish list. (Christmas is one word / I think I can get from mom, dad, or buy my self. >>I think I can get from mom, dad, or buy them myself. (intended message) Here it is my wish list. >>Here is my wishlist. (unnecessary word) 1. New game CD - I don't play game many times. I just only play at weekends. Just play station. >>I don't play game a lot. I just only play on weekends. (choice of words) 2. I have game CD of complication, and soccer game. I want a basket ball game CD or Starcraft Game CD. >>I have a game CD complication of soccer games. I want a basket ball game CD or Starcraft Game CD. (lack of article) I saw my cousin was playing Starcraft. >>Good sentence! It seem very fun. >>It seemed very fun. (verb tense) I like Pretos. >>Good sentence! I cousin like Terrain. >>My cousin like Terrain. (choice of pronoun) My brother don't like Starcraft. >>My brother doesn't like Starcraft. (subject-verb agreement) I want a basket ball game CD because I like basketball. >>Good sentence! 2. New labtop - My labtop is really my father's. >>New laptop - My laptop is really my father's. (spelling) It means that If father take it to company, I can't use it. >>It means that if father takes it to the company, I can't use it. (subject-verb agreement / lack of article) My dad said he is going to buy me a new labtop when I become 5 or 6th grade, but I want to get now. >>My dad said he is going to buy me a new laptop when I become 5th or 6th grade, but I want to get it now. (spelling) 3. New bike - The bike that I'm riding is my dad's. >>Good sentence! It means that used when he was young(?). So it is very old and it crash easily. >>It means that he used it when he was young, so it is very old and it crashes easily. (lack of pronoun / subject-verb agreement) It also very old. So I want to get a new bike. >>It is also very old so I want to get a new bike. (sentence construction) I'm gathering the money to buy a bike, but it is too small to buy a bike. >>I'm saving money to buy a bike, but it is not enough to buy a bike. (choice of word) 4. Lego Star Wars - Days ago, I saw a very big and very good Lego. >>A few days ago, I saw a very big and very good lego. It was Lego Star Wars. >>Good sentence! I think it is the best Star Wars Lego I've seen. >>Good sentence! It is so wonderful. So I want to get it one. >>It is so wonderful so I want to get one. (sentence construction) 5. R/C helicopter or plane. - When I went to the Science park, I flight the R/C(remote control) Air plane. But sometimes, I think helicopter is better. So I want to get one of them. >>What do you mean? your ideas are contradicting. 6. New BB gun - My M-16 gun is also from my dad. So it is very old too. So I want a new, with laser pointer on it. >>New BB gun - My M-16 gun is also from my dad, so it is very old too,so I want a new one, with a laser pointer on it. (sentence construction / lack of article) I think it is all done. >>Good sentence! I can't get all these persent, but I will work hard to get it. >>I can't get all these presents, but I will work hard to get them. (pluralization) Thanks for writing! I hope you'll get all those presents!