1 A&Acapture 2014-12-29 2 answer 2014-11-14 3 Robot suit fight 9(finale) 2014-10-08 4 robot arm 2014-09-25 5 Teacher! 2014-08-28 6 Robot Suit Fight 8 2014-08-21 7 Robot suit fight 7 2014-08-06 8 Robot suit fight 6 2014-07-30 9 Robot suit fight 5 2014-07-23 10 robot suit 4 2014-07-14 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김찬호 작성일 2012-11-12 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 Manchester United 내 용 Do you know Manchester United. You will know this team. No, you have to know this team. It is now best team in England Premieur League. That team is my dad's favorite team in England Premieur Legaue. My favorite team in England Premieur Legaue is Chelsea. My favorite team in Premera Liga is FC Barcelona. But today, I'm going to write about Manchester United so listen carefully. There are many famous players in Manchester United. David Dea Gea, Wayne Lunie, and many other player. There was Ji sung-Park in this team, but he move to Queens Park Rangers. Queens Park Rangers is second bad team in England Premieur League. 19th. But Manchester United is now winning. Last time, I searched on the internet, Chelsea was winning. My brother's favorite team is Arsenar and that team is on 7th. My dad like this team because of Wayne Rooney. In korea, we call Devill Rooney, because he is very good player. I want Chelsea win again. 답변자 tc0073 답변일 2012-11-13 답변내용 Do you know Manchester United. >>Do you know Manchester United? (incorrect punctuation mark) You will know this team. >>Good sentence! No, you have to know this team. >>Good sentence! It is now best team in England Premieur League. >>It is now the best team in the English Premier League. (lack of article / spelling / choice of word) That team is my dad's favorite team in England Premieur Legaue. >>That team is my dad's favorite team in the English Premier League. (lack of article / spelling) My favorite team in England Premieur Legaue is Chelsea. >>My favorite team in the English Premier Legaue is Chelsea. (lack of article / spelling) My favorite team in Premera Liga is FC Barcelona. But today, I'm going to write about Manchester United so listen carefully. >>My favorite team in Primera Liga is FC Barcelona but today, I'm going to write about Manchester United so read it carefully. (spelling / choice of word) There are many famous players in Manchester United. David Dea Gea, Wayne Lunie, and many other player. >>There are many famous players in Manchester United like David Dea Gea, Wayne Lunie, and many others. (lack of conjunction) There was Ji sung-Park in this team, but he move to Queens Park Rangers. >>Jisung Park was in this team, but he moved to the Queens Park Rangers. (intended message) Queens Park Rangers is second bad team in England Premieur League. 19th. But Manchester United is now winning. >>Queens Park Rangers is the second bad team in the English Premier League, which is at number 19, but Manchester United is now winning. (lack of article / spelling) Last time, I searched on the internet, Chelsea was winning. >>Good sentence! My brother's favorite team is Arsenar and that team is on 7th. >>My brother's favorite team is Arsenal and that team is at number 7. (spelling / choice of preposition) My dad like this team because of Wayne Rooney. >>My dad likes this team because of Wayne Rooney. (subject-verb agreement) In korea, we call Devill, Rooney, because he is very good player. >>In korea, we call Devill, Rooney, because he is a very good player. (lack of article) I want Chelsea win again. >>I want Chelsea to win again. (lack of preposition) Thanks for writing! I had fun reading your diary!