1 A&Acapture 2014-12-29 2 answer 2014-11-14 3 Robot suit fight 9(finale) 2014-10-08 4 robot arm 2014-09-25 5 Teacher! 2014-08-28 6 Robot Suit Fight 8 2014-08-21 7 Robot suit fight 7 2014-08-06 8 Robot suit fight 6 2014-07-30 9 Robot suit fight 5 2014-07-23 10 robot suit 4 2014-07-14 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김찬호 작성일 2012-11-08 Weather    Feeling  As usua 제 목 Social study-money(1) 내 용 Today, I'm going to talk about money. It is one branch of Social study. Social study is my fourth favorite subject. I like the money part most, so I'm going to tell you. First money. Long time ago, there were no money. No Dollar, no Won, no Yen, no Pound. They use to change things. Like a fish and a bag of rice. It is called barter, but that was bad idea. Because they fight with it. Person A who have a knife want to change a bag of rice and one knife. But Person B who have a bag of rice want to change a bag of rice and two knives. So they fight. Second money. The money was more evolve. They use something as money. Like sea shells, stones, nuts or someting like that. There was problm too. See shells. stones, and nuts were very common. So anybody can be rich. So they have to think about new idea. Third money. This money is just like today. It more evolved. Like Won, Dollar or any kinds of number that we use in this era. Stock is not a money. It is a way to earn money. Fourth money. This is credit card or Cyber money. credit card is if we don't have money, we can use card to buy someting. But we have to pay when card receipt is come. Cyber money is kind of money when we use on cyber. Like in game, cyword or something like that. In Kart rider, they use Cyber money for Lucci and in Mapple story, they use Cyber money for Pesso. In Cyworld, they use acorn. I want to be rich some they. 답변자 tc0073 답변일 2012-11-09 답변내용 Today, I'm going to talk about money. >>Good sentence! It is one branch of Social study. >>It is one branch of Social studies. (terminology) Social study is my fourth favorite subject. >>Social studies is my fourth favorite subject. (terminology) I like the money part most, so I'm going to tell you. >>I like the part about money the most, so I'm going to tell you about it. (intended message) First money. Long time ago, there were no money. No Dollar, no Won, no Yen, no Pound. >>Long time ago, there were no money like o Dollar, Won, Yen or Pound. (sentence construction) They use to change things. Like a fish and a bag of rice. >>They used to exchange things like fish and a bag of rice. (verb tense It is called barter, but that was bad idea. Because they fight with it. >>It is called barter, but that was a bad idea because they fought because of it. (lack of article / verb tense / choice of word) Person A who have a knife want to change a bag of rice and one knife. But Person B who have a bag of rice want to change a bag of rice and two knives. So they fight. >>What do you mean? Second money. The money was more evolve. >>Money evolved more. (unnecessary article / verb tense) They use something as money. Like sea shells, stones, nuts or someting like that. >>They used something as money like sea shells, stones, nuts or someting like that. (verb tense / sentence construction) There was problm too. >>There was a problem too. (lack of article / spelling) See shells. stones, and nuts were very common. So anybody can be rich. So they have to think about new idea. >>Sea shells, stones and nuts were very common so anybody could be rich, so they thought of a new idea. (sentence construction / spelling / verb tense) Third money. This money is just like today. >>>This money is just like what we have today. (intended message) It more evolved. Like Won, Dollar or any kinds of number that we use in this era. >>It evolved more like won, dollar and other kinds of currencies that we have today. (intended message) Stock is not a money. >>Stock is not money. (unnecessary article) It is a way to earn money. >>Good sentence! Fourth money. This is credit card or Cyber money. >>Good sentence! credit card is if we don't have money, we can use card to buy someting. But we have to pay when card receipt is come. >>We can use a credit card if we don't have cash, we can use it to buy something, but we have to pay when we receive the bill. (intended message0 Cyber money is kind of money when we use on cyber. Like in game, cyword or something like that. >>Cyber money is a kind of money that we use on the internet like in games, cyworld or something like that. (lack of article / choice of word / sentence construction / spelling) In Kart rider, they use Cyber money for Lucci and in Mapple story, they use Cyber money for Pesso. >>What do you mean? In Cyworld, they use acorn. >>Good sentence! I want to be rich some they. >>I want to be rich someday. (spelling) Thanks for writing! Your diary was so informative!