1 A&Acapture 2014-12-29 2 answer 2014-11-14 3 Robot suit fight 9(finale) 2014-10-08 4 robot arm 2014-09-25 5 Teacher! 2014-08-28 6 Robot Suit Fight 8 2014-08-21 7 Robot suit fight 7 2014-08-06 8 Robot suit fight 6 2014-07-30 9 Robot suit fight 5 2014-07-23 10 robot suit 4 2014-07-14 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김찬호 작성일 2012-10-24 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 Soccer 내 용 Today at school, I played soccer with my friend. I was the GK. My team was Hyun-sae, Sin-yang, Tae-min, Jae-mo, Me, Young-jun. We were green team. Other Team was white. It is just like R.Madrid vs. Celltic. R. Madrid's uniforms are white. But Celltic's are green. The winner was R. Madrid. That was too bad. Score was 2:1, but it was very unfair. I will tell you the story. First goal was ours. Tae-min did it. It was fantastic. I was GK(goal keeper).One thing was there was a highlight. I kick really hard, it was little miss. Now it is time for other team's score. At the coner kick I score own goal. Ball was hit by my hand and go in to the goal line. I was very upset about that. Next goal was in by penalty kick. It was unfair. That time Tae-min was GK, and he saved it. Then coach said "One more chance to white team." Then the ball goes in. Don't you think it is unfair? I think it is very bad. women team was more awful. It was 4:0 all battle, we lose. Next time I want to win 답변자 tc0073 답변일 2012-10-25 답변내용 Today at school, I played soccer with my friend. >>Good sentence! I was the GK. >>Good sentence! My team was Hyun-sae, Sin-yang, Tae-min, Jae-mo, Me, Young-jun. >>My team was comprised ofHyun-sae, Sin-yang, Tae-min, Jae-mo, Me and Young-jun. (lack of verb) We were green team. >>We were in the green team. (lack of preposition and article) Other Team was white. >>The other team was white. (lack of article) It is just like R.Madrid vs. Celltic. >>It was just like R.Madrid vs. Celltic. (verb tense) R. Madrid's uniforms are white. But Celltic's are green. >>R. Madrid's uniforms are white but Celltic's are green. (sentence construction) The winner was R. Madrid. >>Good sentence! That was too bad. >>Good sentence! Score was 2:1, but it was very unfair. >>The score was 2:1 butit was very unfair. (lack of article) I will tell you the story. >>Good sentence! First goal was ours. >>The first goal was ours. (lack of article) Tae-min did it. >>Good sentence! It was fantastic. >>Good sentence! I was GK(goal keeper). >>I was the goal keeper. (lack of article) One thing was there was a highlight. >>There was one thing that was hihlighted. (sentence construction) I kick really hard, it was little miss. >>I kicked it really hard, but I missed it a little. (verb tense) Now it is time for other team's score. >>Good sentence! At the coner kick I score own goal. >>At the coner kick I scored my own goal. (verb tense) Ball was hit by my hand and go in to the goal line. >>The ball hit my hand and went into the goal line. (lack of article / verb tense) I was very upset about that. >>I was very upset because of that. (choice of words) Next goal was in by penalty kick. >>The next goal was in by a penalty kick. (lack of article It was unfair. >>Good sentence! That time Tae-min was GK, and he saved it. >>That time Tae-min was the GK and he saved it. (lack of article) Then coach said "One more chance to white team." >>Then coach said "One more chance for the white team." (choice of preposition / lack of article) Then the ball goes in. >>Then the ball went in. (verb tense) Don't you think it is unfair? >>Good sentence! I think it is very bad. >>Good sentence! women team was more awful. >>The women's team was more awful. (lack of article) It was 4:0 all battle, we lose. >>It was 4:0, we lost in all the games. (intended message) Next time I want to win. >>Good sentence! Thanks for writing! Have a great day!