1 A&Acapture 2014-12-29 2 answer 2014-11-14 3 Robot suit fight 9(finale) 2014-10-08 4 robot arm 2014-09-25 5 Teacher! 2014-08-28 6 Robot Suit Fight 8 2014-08-21 7 Robot suit fight 7 2014-08-06 8 Robot suit fight 6 2014-07-30 9 Robot suit fight 5 2014-07-23 10 robot suit 4 2014-07-14 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김찬호 작성일 2012-09-18 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 Soccer 내 용 For weeks, I will start sport diary. Today's topic is SOCCER. Their are many soccer player in the wolrd David De gea, Pepe Reina, Didier Drogba, Hulk, Ka Ka, Lionel Messi, Gonzalo Higuain Wayen Rooney. And other good player. Ji Dong-won and Ku Ja-chul are Korean player. Soccer is very fun and pouplar sports. Their are many soccer team on the Earth. Manchester United, FC Seoul, Busan I' Park, Swansy city, and many others. My best England Premieum Leage team is Manchester United. My favorite K-Leage(also known as Korean Leage) team is Busan I' park. It is because that I borned in Busan. Okay, let me tell you about soccer rule. Some people said "If you know Offside, that mean you know all the rule" Offside is very strange and hard rule. Foward can't stay behind the Defence. Because Foward will stay there. If ball is in front of him, he will just kick. that is very bad thing. Do you understand? So next thing is Yellow card and Red card. Yellow card is mean "becareful" Red card's mean? that mean... "YOUR OUT!!" You can't play game anymore. I think soccer's world is wonderful. image view 답변자 tc0073 답변일 2012-09-19 답변내용 For weeks, I will start sport diary. >>This week, I will start a sport diary. (intended message / lack of article) Today's topic is SOCCER. >>Today's topic is soccer. (do not capitalize) Their are many soccer player in the wolrd David De gea, Pepe Reina, Didier Drogba, Hulk, Ka Ka, Lionel Messi, Gonzalo Higuain Wayen Rooney. >>There are many soccer players in the world namely David De gea, Pepe Reina, Didier Drogba, Hulk, Ka Ka, Lionel Messi, Gonzalo Higuain and Wayne Rooney. (spelling / pluralization / lack of conjunction) And other good player. Ji Dong-won and Ku Ja-chul are Korean player. >>There also other good Korean soccer players namely Ji Dong-won and Ku Ja-chul. (sentence construction) Soccer is very fun and pouplar sports. >>Soccer is a very fun and popular sport. (lack of article / spelling) Their are many soccer team on the Earth. >>There are many soccer teams on Earth. (spelling / pluralization / unnecessary article) Manchester United, FC Seoul, Busan I' Park, Swansy city, and many others. >>Those teams are Manchester United, FC Seoul, Busan I' Park, Swansy city and many others. (sentence construction) My best England Premieum Leage team is Manchester United. >>The best English Premier League team for me is Manchester United. (intended message) My favorite K-Leage(also known as Korean Leage) team is Busan I' park. >>My favorite K-Leage(also known as Korean League) team is Busan I' park. (spelling) It is because that I borned in Busan. >>It is because I was born in Busan. (verb usage) Okay, let me tell you about soccer rule. >>Okay, let me tell you about soccer rules. (pluralization) Some people said "If you know Offside, that mean you know all the rule" Offside is very strange and hard rule. >>Some people said "If you know Offside, that means you know all the rules" Offside is a very strange and hard rule. (subject-verb agreement / pluralization / lack of article) Foward can't stay behind the Defence. Because Foward will stay there. >>The Foward player can't stay behind the Defense because the Forward player will stay there. (sentence construction) If ball is in front of him, he will just kick. >>If the ball is in front of him, he will just kick it. (lack of article and pronoun) that is very bad thing. >>That is a very bad thing. (capitalization / lack of article) Do you understand? >>Good sentence! So next thing is Yellow card and Red card. >>The next things I will explain are the Yellow card and the Red card. (sentence construction) Yellow card is mean "becareful" >>The Yellow card means " be careful. (sentence construction) Red card's mean? that mean... "YOUR OUT!!" >>The Red card means "you're out!". (sentence construction) You can't play game anymore. >> You can't play the game anymore. (lack of article) I think soccer's world is wonderful. >>Good sentence! Thanks for the effort! I enjoyed reading your diary.