1 A&Acapture 2014-12-29 2 answer 2014-11-14 3 Robot suit fight 9(finale) 2014-10-08 4 robot arm 2014-09-25 5 Teacher! 2014-08-28 6 Robot Suit Fight 8 2014-08-21 7 Robot suit fight 7 2014-08-06 8 Robot suit fight 6 2014-07-30 9 Robot suit fight 5 2014-07-23 10 robot suit 4 2014-07-14 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김찬호 작성일 2012-09-07 Weather    Feeling  As usua 제 목 The Athletes that I want to meet 내 용 Today, I want to write who is 'The Athletes that I want to meet.' There are many Athlete in the world. Like Michael Phelps. Or Ryan Lochte, Sun Yang Zhang Lin. And Roonie and Ryan Giggs. Korean athletes? I want to meet Ki sung-yueng, Park Ji-sung and Greco Roman wrestler, Kim Hyeun-uoo. I think they are wonderful athletes. But now, I will tell you 3 Athletes that I want to meet. 1. Micheal Phelps. >>He is the man with most many medals in the world. He gets 21 Olympic medals. He is just like medal collector. Or medal vacuum cleaner. Do you think so too? I think only one medal is hard enough. But what the?? 21 medals? I think it is imposible to do it. That's why I pick him. 2. Park Ji-sung and Ki sung-yueng. >>I think this two soccer player is the best I ever saw. First Park Ji-sung. He was at the Manchester United. Also, he is the first korean soccer player who joined Manchester United. And Ki sung-yueng is the perfect soccer player. He managing to send the ball where it should be and complet the most difficult corner kicks. I want to do complet the most difficult corner kick. 3. David de Gea >>He is the Goal keeper of Manchester United. I'm little good at GK. And I always had a question. "Who is the Manchester United's GK?" So I want to write about him. He is one of the World very good Goal keepers. I think he is good. So I want to meet him 답변자 tc0073 답변일 2012-09-10 답변내용 Today, I want to write who is 'The Athletes that I want to meet.' >>Today, I want to write about 'The Athletes that I want to meet.' (choice of word) There are many Athlete in the world. Like Michael Phelps. Or Ryan Lochte, Sun Yang Zhang Lin. And Roonie and Ryan Giggs. >>There are many Athletes in the worldlike Michael Phelps,Ryan Lochte, Sun Yang Zhang Lin, Roonie and Ryan Giggs. (sentence construction / pluralization) Korean athletes? I want to meet Ki sung-yueng, Park Ji-sung and Greco Roman wrestler, Kim Hyeun-uoo. >>The Korean athletes that I want to meet are Ki sung-yueng, Park Ji-sung and the Greco Roman wrestler, Kim Hyeun-uoo. (sentence construction) I think they are wonderful athletes. But now, I will tell you 3 Athletes that I want to meet. >>I think they are wonderful athletes, but now, I will tell you 3 Athletes that I want to meet. (sentence construction) 1. Micheal Phelps. >>He is the man with most many medals in the world. >>He is the man with the most medals in the world. (redundancy) He gets 21 Olympic medals. >>He got 21 Olympic medals. (verb tense) He is just like medal collector. Or medal vacuum cleaner. >>He is just like a medal collector or a medal vacuum cleaner. (sentence construction) Do you think so too? >>Good sentence! I think only one medal is hard enough. But what the?? 21 medals? >>I think getting only one medal is hard enough but he got 21 medals. (intended message / sentence construction) I think it is imposible to do it. That's why I pick him. >> I think it is imposible to do it, that's why I picked him. (verb tense) 2. Park Ji-sung and Ki sung-yueng. >>I think this two soccer player is the best I ever saw. >>I think those two soccer players are the best I ever saw. (pluralization / choice of word) First Park Ji-sung. >>First, Park Ji-sung. (lack of punctuation mark: comma) He was at the Manchester United. >>He was at the Manchester United. Also, he is the first korean soccer player who joined Manchester United. >>He is also the first korean soccer player who joined Manchester United. (word order) And Ki sung-yueng is the perfect soccer player. >>Ki sung-yueng is the perfect soccer player. (unnecessary word) He managing to send the ball where it should be and complet the most difficult corner kicks. >>He manages to send the ball where it should be and completes the most difficult corner kicks. (word form / subject-verb agreement) I want to do complet the most difficult corner kick. >> I want to complet the most difficult corner kick. (unnecessary word) 3. David de Gea >>He is the Goal keeper of Manchester United. >>Good sentence! I'm little good at GK. >>I'm a little good at goal keeping. (lack of article) And I always had a question. "Who is the Manchester United's GK?" So I want to write about him. >>I was often asked the question " Who is Manchester United's GK?, so I want to write about it. (intended message) He is one of the World very good Goal keepers. >>He is one of the worlds very good goal keepers. (capitalize only the proper nouns / pluralization) I think he is good. So I want to meet him >>I think he is good so I want to meet him. (sentence construction) Thanks for writing and keep up the good work!