1 A&Acapture 2014-12-29 2 answer 2014-11-14 3 Robot suit fight 9(finale) 2014-10-08 4 robot arm 2014-09-25 5 Teacher! 2014-08-28 6 Robot Suit Fight 8 2014-08-21 7 Robot suit fight 7 2014-08-06 8 Robot suit fight 6 2014-07-30 9 Robot suit fight 5 2014-07-23 10 robot suit 4 2014-07-14 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김찬호 작성일 2012-08-31 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 Play with my friends 내 용 I rode a bike at park with my friends. Alvin, Ji-woo, and my brother Beetle. We rode a bike about 3 hours, It was very fun. Also we played football with a bottles. I drank Hwanta and left empty bottle. Also Ji-woo got a Hwanta bottle too. So the match was just like tournamant. Me and Ji-woo played one game first and Beetle and Alvin played. Then me and Beetle lose. So me and Beetle played and I lose. And Ji-woo lose and played with Beetle. Jii-woo won and played with Alvin again. He lose. So Alvin was the Champ. The next thing we did is 'Roll play' I was middle school student in 2nd grade, Also all of my friends. We cooked, slept(not really), and did many other things. Like plant seed(just throw the small stones at ground), eating(not really). And had a great time I want a this time again 답변자 tc0073 답변일 2012-09-03 답변내용 I rode a bike at park with my friends. Alvin, Ji-woo, and my brother Beetle. >>I rode a bike at the park with my friends Alvin, Ji-woo and my brother Beetle. (lack of article / unnecessary punctuation marks) We rode a bike about 3 hours. >>We rode a bike for about 3 hours. (lack of preposition) It was very fun. >>Good sentence! Also we played football with a bottles. >>We also played football with bottles. (word order / unnecessary article) I drank Hwanta and left empty bottle. >>I drank Hwanta and left an empty bottle. (lack of article) Also Ji-woo got a Hwanta bottle too. So the match was just like tournamant. >> Ji-woo also got a Hwanta bottle ,so the match was just like a tournament. (word order / lack of article / spelling) Me and Ji-woo played one game first and Beetle and Alvin played. >>Me and Ji-woo played one game first, then Beetle and Alvin played. (choice of conjunction) Then me and Beetle lose. So me and Beetle played and I lose. >>Then Beetle and I lost, so we played and I lost. (verb tense) And Ji-woo lose and played with Beetle. >>Ji-woo lost and played with Beetle. (unnecessary word) Jii-woo won and played with Alvin again. He lose. So Alvin was the Champ. >>Ji-woo won so he played with Alvin again but he lost so Alvin was the champion. (verb tense / sentence construction) The next thing we did is 'Roll play' I was middle school student in 2nd grade, Also all of my friends. >>The next thing we did was 'Role playing' I was a middle school student in 2nd grade and all of my friends also. (spelling / lack of article ) We cooked, slept(not really), and did many other things. Like plant seed(just throw the small stones at ground), eating(not really). >>We cooked, slept and did many other things like planting seeds and eating. (sentence construction) And had a great time I want a this time again >>We had a great time so I want to have great time like this again. (intended message) Thanks for writing! I had fun reading it.