1 A&Acapture 2014-12-29 2 answer 2014-11-14 3 Robot suit fight 9(finale) 2014-10-08 4 robot arm 2014-09-25 5 Teacher! 2014-08-28 6 Robot Suit Fight 8 2014-08-21 7 Robot suit fight 7 2014-08-06 8 Robot suit fight 6 2014-07-30 9 Robot suit fight 5 2014-07-23 10 robot suit 4 2014-07-14 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김찬호 작성일 2012-08-21 Weather    Feeling  As usua 제 목 Second Day at school 내 용 Today is second day at school. It was very exited to meet friends again. I wrote on yesterday's diary to play board game. And we play. First, Ji-Woo doesn't play because he have to creat the new weapon, the tank. It is $2,000. So It was very expensive for me. I have only $100 left. But Sin-Yang have $45,350. Isn't he rich? And Hyun-su was begar in this game. He have $0.00. But I have factory. Factories can produce anything. If they want to. So I produce tanks. I said tank-s. So that mean I produced many tanks. Actually I produce two tanks. It was very fun. First me and Sin-Yang help each other and kill Hyun-Su first. Then SIn-Yang betrayal me. The story is like this. First I send Big army to Hyun-Su's house. And crash the fences. Now The Hyun-Su's house is all open for me and Sin-Yang. And Sin-Yang send all of his 3 tanks. But Hyun-su have 3 tanks too. So I shoot Misile at Hyun-Su's house. And now Hyun-Su dead(In the game of course). Now I only have a tank and fence. Sin-Yang have 5 misiles and no tank or army. Then he shoots 4 missiles at my fence, and 3 tanks. I didn't have money to buy army or tanks. And my factory is ruin too. So Sin-Yang shoot last missile at my house. Ka-Boom!! My house crash. And I pass away too. That mean the Sin-Yang is the winner. Ah I want to play tomorrow. 답변자 tc0013 답변일 2012-08-23 답변내용 Today is second day at school. (correct) It was very exited to meet friends again. >> I was very excited to meet my friends again. (sentence construction) I wrote on yesterday's diary to play board game. >> I wrote on yesterday's diary about playing board game. (word choice - preposition / form of verb) And we play. >> And we played. (past form of verb) First, Ji-Woo doesn't play because he have to creat the new weapon, the tank. >> First, Ji-Woo didn't, play because he had to create the new weapon, the tank. (sentence construction) It is $2,000. (correct) So It was very expensive for me. >> So it was very expensive for me. (small case letter - not beginning of statement) I have only $100 left. >> I had only $100 left. (past form of verb) But Sin-Yang have $45,350. >> But Sin-Yang had $45,350. (past form of verb) Isn't he rich? (correct) And Hyun-su was begar in this game. (correct) He have $0.00. >> He had $0.00. (past form of verb) But I have factory. (correct) Factories can produce anything. (correct) If they want to. So I produce tanks. >> If they want to, they can produce tanks. (sentence constructio) I said tank-s. So that mean I produced many tanks. (correct) Actually I produce two tanks. (correct) It was very fun. (correct) First me and Sin-Yang help each other and kill Hyun-Su first. >> First, me and Sin-Yang helped each other and killed Hyun-Su first. (past form of verb / lack of punctuation mark) Then SIn-Yang betrayal me. >> Then SIn-Yang betrayed me. (form of verb) The story is like this. (correct) First I send Big army to Hyun-Su's house. >> First, I sent big army to Hyun-Su's house. (sentence construction) And crash the fences. >> And crashed the fences. (past form of verb) Now The Hyun-Su's house is all open for me and Sin-Yang. (correct) And Sin-Yang send all of his 3 tanks. >> And Sin-Yang sent all of his 3 tanks. (past form of verb) But Hyun-su have 3 tanks too. >> But Hyun-su had 3 tanks too. (past form of verb) So I shoot Misile at Hyun-Su's house. >> So I shot missiles at Hyun-Su's house. (spelling / past form of verb) And now Hyun-Su dead(In the game of course). >> And now Hyun-Su is dead (in the game of course). (lack of helping verb) Now I only have a tank and fence. (correct) Sin-Yang have 5 misiles and no tank or army. >> Sin-Yang had 5 missiles, but no tank or army. (spelling / word choice - conjunction) Then he shoots 4 missiles at my fence, and 3 tanks. >> Then he shot 4 missiles at my fence, and 3 tanks. (past form of verb) I didn't have money to buy army or tanks. (correct) And my factory is ruin too. (correct) So Sin-Yang shoot last missile at my house. >> So Sin-Yang shot last missile at my house. (past form of verb) Ka-Boom!! My house crash. >> Ka-Boom!! My house crashed. (past form of verb) And I pass away too. >> And I passed away too. (past form of verb) That mean the Sin-Yang is the winner. (correct) Ah I want to play tomorrow. (correct) @@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@ That game is so violent. It would affect your attitude. Try to spend more time on your books.